Jack Done

REAPER

Name| Jack
Height| 6'1
Weight 173
Age| looks 23
Gender| Male


Race|Reaper
Ability| He has the ability to absorb solar rays and heat. Depending on how much he absorbs he increases in strength. Tho his ability doesn't work at night, because of this his cells act as storage compartments. This allows him to use this ability at night, tho it is weaker lets say when using his powers in the day he could lift 500lbs at night at most he could lift about 250 so it halves the increase. And if he absorbs a whole days sunlight he can last about six hours at night. If he uses his powers in the day while absorbing sunlight his cells use the reserves they store up so in the end he won't have enough to last the six hours. When absorbing rays his strength, speed, and agility increase to that of an Olympic gold medalist, but not all at once he has to distribute the energy to which one he would like at that time. Using this usually causes Jack great pain, causing him to normally skip this and go straight to his monster form. Once he activates this ability he tends to radiate heat and give off a redish aura. The stat increase is 10 and it lasts 4 posts in the day and 2 posts at night, while after words it has a cool down period of 6 posts before using the ability again overall. During the cool down period he losses 3 stat points.
Monster Form|

Standing at a good nine and a half feet yet he seems around a good six do to his hunch, and weighting in at a wopping seven hundred pounds, Jack becomes the embodiment of fire its self. A deep red colored hair pours from his head, arms, and legs. His face is said to resemble that of a savage animal. His body riddled with scars tells a tale all on its own. His skin becomes a rather deep read while his eyes are yellow and foreboding. His muscles increase a good ten fold and he has twin wristbands. Horns and sharp teeth are not excluded in the jack package, the horns are great and strong and have a red orange look to them. The flames in between them gives them a kind of glow that could be seen as beautiful if you don't look at his face.
Enhanced Abilities (in Monster Form)|While in monster form the absorbtion of solar rays and heat is still needed. But not only does it improve his physical skills he also gives off a flame that has the ability to encumber him. Although the flames cannot be shot at the rank of recruit. Gaining higher levels increases the master of the flames, maybe to the point of flight. But at low levels it can only be used in combat as in extra kick. Thought while using this ability it causes him pain and if unchecked can cause him to go feral. The flames can be dodged by just dodging his punches and or kicks, and the flames can be douched if he is either knocked out, has lack of sunlight and the flames are smothered, or its not and you douse them. The stat increase on this would be around 15 and it lasts 3 posts with the draw back being a cool down lasting a good 6 posts before using the ability again overall. Also he losses 5 stat points during the cool down period.


Likes|
Fire-It reminds him of himself untameable and forever burning
Sun- Seeing it as the birth place of all he is
Philosophy- Seeing this as one of the few things humans have done right
Jokes- He loves laughing and jokes even tho it seldom happens
Dislikes|
Moon- Hating it for the fact that it steals the suns light
Hunters- Finding them a thorn in his almighty side
Manipulation- He tends to manipulate those weaker then him and enjoys it
Humans- Jack feels they are a lower species and tends to think of them trash
Dishonorable- Anyone or anything without honor and would dishonor themselves or those around them seeing them as things that can actually be lower them humans
Goals|
King-To become king of the reapers
Hunters- Jack sees them as the trashes view of all that is good and wholesome or for the lack of a better term there champion. Jack wants to show the trash that there champions are just as weak and feeble as the rest of the trash.
Fears|
Death-Dieing before reaching his goal
Personality| Flirt: Jack is considered an enormous flirt when it comes to the ladies. Finding this a good way to get what he wants with out much trouble. Manipulating the opposite sex with ease makes is quite a pass time for him. He also tends to do it so often he does it with out noticing it mid conversation with a women. He himself has even agreed at times that he hits on anything female that moves.

Honorable: Tho hes a manipulative bastard he still has honor and often regrets his ways. His honor is one of few things he feels makes him like the hunters he loathes, if they have honor. Never running away cowardly or attacking the weak or innocent. Tho he knows hes a monster he feels that the only thing separating himself from the rest of the beast are his morals.

Brooding: Always brooding on his actions and feeling a little guilty for things that he does. Tho he hates this he feels he should reflect on his actions and some how give penance. Tho since he feels he can never truly give penance he often gives what he has to the less fortunate. Doing this tends to help the nagging depression that he tends to fall into after reflecting.

Manipulator: Tho he might do things that are completely out of character for his species you should keep in mind that hes still a reaper. Finding this fun and proftiable he does this to mostly to get what he wants. But on occasion he tends to do this as a show of power to those that oppose him, telling them he can make your wife do this or that. This is showing his influence which in turn shows that if he wanted to instead of him making your wife spit on your food he could have made her poison it. Tho at the end of the day he still reflexes on this and finds it a terrible habit that he should kick.

Philosophic: After reading nothing but philosophy books for most of his life he began to use them to philosophies himself. Finding it easier then and funner then most of his other daily things.

Family|None
History| He was always told he was strong, yet he always felt so weak. He wasn't a fan of questioning other peoples opinions out loud. But in his head the questions where louder then his own voice. Feeding or "just getting by" as Jack called it was more and more frequent his parents abandoned him in a ghost town in some desert. The only things left in said town was a library, a bell tower, and a mansion.

He lived in the mansion in a dream, to him the mansion was filled with kids his age and all the desert he could it. They had a nice butler named Jarvis who was as good as they came, and his parents where the best in the world. But as he grew hungry from eating all the imaginary ice cream and cookies he could something would happen. He'd blackout and wake up in the same place the bell tower. And what else was odd was he woke up at dusk right before night fall.

At first it was once a day but as time went on it grew to twice or three times. Things really started to get weird when he awoke in the middle of eating a rabbit. Dropping the rabbit down the bell tower he crawled into the corner scared and confused. What was happening to him and why him for that matter. The next day as he played with his "friends" he started to black out again, rushing to get to the closet he locked himself in hoping whatever happened would stop.

As he slipped into the dark he felt safe for once, but as he awoke on the bell tower tears ran down his face like a waterfall. He slumped his way home stumped on what to do and discouraged above all else. Entering the mansion slowly he smelt a rather odd different smell. Rushing to figure out what it was exactly making that smell, turning corners at break neck speeds he began to realize the smell was coming from the closet. In awe he stood in front of the closet door the sight was odd and horrifying.

Not only was the door threw the next wall but it was also scratched up and burned. Even the doorway was ripped and burned, this began to make Jack question. What was he exactly, and what was he doing while he was blacked out. Years passed as Jack was kept in wonder, bored with his imagination around the time he turned ten he began to look threw the library. Frustrated by the gibberish he couldn't read he began destroy the books burning them in fires once every week.

As time went on he began to wonder about the door and the rabbit, soon he began to stand out in the open imagining all the things he used to just to get to that one point. After years of working on it he finally got to the point of keeping conciseness. When this day came joy, fear, excitement, and even enlightenment flowed threw his body like a surge of energy. He could only laugh as he began to test out this new body of his. The arms where hairier then normal and he had claws, but he had such great strength, stamina, and speed he didn't care.

That night he packed a bag of books, water, and food and headed out into the desert to find someone anyone that was real. He was sixteen when he left, leaving behind the only life he knew for whatever it was that was beyond the desert. After traversing the desert for some months Jack had lost hope and knew he couldn't turn back. Just as hope was lost he met a man a rather odd man, a drunkard in fact. Jack ecstatic to have met someone at lest overwhelmed the man with questions, questions he had wanted to ask for years.

The man rather cold to Jack sent him packing, but Jack not knowing of anyone else came back a number of days later. He pleaded the man to at least teach him how to read, and so the man did. The man taught him everything he could about reading and sent him off. Jack now having a use for the books read them as he headed out once again. This time spending years in the desert until reaching a actual civilization.

The books he had in his sack where all philosophy books each one written by someone else and each one more and more intriguing and understandable as he reads them over and over and over again. Jack made it to the city around the time he was twenty one and discovered alcohol. In this discovery he figured out why people drank it, to forget there pasts. Jack did just that he drank forgot some, found a group of people like him called reapers, and did some other minor things. The details are all lost at the bottom of bottles left behind.

General Information:

You have what age he looks like, but could we also have his real age? Beyond that not too much of a problem here. ^^

Powers and abilities:

Ability-

This allows him to use this ability at night, tho it is watered down and has a time period.

Watered down how? How much weaker is it? Could you please explain how much sunlight he needs to absorb for him to store it within his body, also if he uses his power through the day does it have any take backs during the night? Like maybe not being able to store as much? I'd like if you cleared this part up.

When absorbing rays his agility, strength, speed, and agility increase to that of an Olympic gold medalist.

Please explain how much faster it is and how much of a draw back is. He shouldn't be heightened in all things at the same time. Please make limitations.

Monster form- Pretty epic, but I don't think its very wolf looking. o.o But its nice. ^^

Enhanced Abilities- So basically he has control of flames? Could you describe ways to avoid it, and maybe put the flames out?

Personality:

Likes- These are good. ^^

Dislikes- Lol he sounds rather cool so far, good dislikes.

Goals- Haha good goals here. ^^ I like them.

Fears- A-okay~

Personality: Wow he sounds like he regrets manipulating people but does it anyways. That's a bit odd I say. Its like, funny really... I like this part though its nice to see how you have the personality broken up like that, it makes it good to read.

History:

Family- None? D'aww. :c

History: All right I read over the history. I must say eating raw animals and what not is icky and causes worms. :c Anywho! It seems interesting that he found this drunk man in the middle of the desert. But Stranger things have happened.

Over all statement

You have some work to do, please make these updates. ^^

hows that?

Looks better. Now we wait for Charmaders review.

Ah, the first Reaper App. Let us begin...

The power was what first caught my eye. It says he can absorb solar energy and use is as physical enhancers, correct? The way you worded it pretty much said "stat increase", just without numbers. Can we get some? Like, his strength increases by 10, or something? And for how long does this last? You stated that it causes him pain, so would there be a "cool down" period after use? Or would his stats drop after the "high" of the ability?

The same goes for his enhanced ability. How much more do the enhancers enhance? If his strength increase by 10 with his first ability, would it increase by 15 now? What would the ehanced drawbacks be? Things like that.

Thats all I saw. Although you did put "tho" instead of "though" a LOT. Just a bit more details power-wise and you're good to go!

fixed

Ok, thanks for adding that.

Still, I wanna see some drawbacks after the use of the techniques. Maybe a slight stat reduction for the duration of the cool-down period?

Ah, ok, I see you edited. However, saying "he loses --SP" doesn't really work. There are three categories he can lose them in, so which ones are they subtracted from?

which ever he used, think of it like this there are 3 buckets and you have a giant thing of water. You can pour the water into either bucket but you can only fill one at a time. Hope that helps

Ah, I see. So he can only increase one stat at a time, and afterwards that stat is dropped by 3 points, for 6 posts. So, does that mean he has to wait 6 posts before using the ability again overall, or just for that one stat?

uhhh to be fair lets just say the former okay?

Alright just edit it all into your app and you're good to go.